Talk:EVE University: Difference between revisions

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The first line should be a statement of '''WHAT E-Uni actually is''' -- it seems we are taking it for granted that everyone already knows. If someone didn't know better, they might think the our sole purpose is to maintain a wiki.

Who the founder was, alliance affiliation, and the current CEO is secondary to the Uni's core purpose and identity. No where on the page does it state, in simple and clear terms, that we are an in-game corporation that actually plays the game, and that new players can join to learn about the game from experienced players.

Who the founder was, alliance affiliation, and the current CEO is secondary to the Uni's core purpose and identity. No where on the page does it state, in simple and clear terms, that we are an in-game corporation that actually plays the game, and that new players can join to learn about the game from experienced players who are dedicating themselves to helping others.

I would recommend something along these lines:

"EVE University [E-UNI] is an EvE corporation created specifically to teach the next generation of pilots. We offer in-game training, live classes, regular fleets, mentors, equipment, and a variety of services to help new players experience everything EvE has to offer. Our primary goal is to help new players get the training they need to become successful in their chosen career and any future corporations they might join. E-Uni founded on 15 March 2004 by Morning Maniac. It is the main corporation of the Ivy League Alliance and hosts the Uniwiki - EVE Online's principle player-run educational resource. The current CEO of EVE University is Jilokari Kurvora.

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 The first line should be a statement of '''WHAT E-Uni actually is''' -- it seems we are taking it for granted that everyone already knows.  If someone didn't know better, they might think the our sole purpose is to maintain a wiki.
-Who the founder was, alliance affiliation, and the current CEO is secondary to the Uni's core purpose and identity.  No where on the page does it state, in simple and clear terms, that we are an in-game corporation that actually plays the game, and that new players can join to learn about the game from experienced players.
+Who the founder was, alliance affiliation, and the current CEO is secondary to the Uni's core purpose and identity.  No where on the page does it state, in simple and clear terms, that we are an in-game corporation that actually plays the game, and that new players can join to learn about the game from experienced players who are dedicating themselves to helping others.
 I would recommend something along these lines:
 "EVE University [E-UNI] is an EvE corporation created specifically to teach the next generation of pilots.  We offer in-game training, live classes, regular fleets, mentors, equipment, and a variety of services to help new players experience everything EvE has to offer.  Our primary goal is to help new players get the training they need to become successful in their chosen career and any future corporations they might join.  E-Uni founded on 15 March 2004 by Morning Maniac. It is the main corporation of the Ivy League Alliance and hosts the Uniwiki - EVE Online's principle player-run educational resource. The current CEO of EVE University is Jilokari Kurvora.